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I lay still in my bed,
Mr. Ted by my side,
And listen hard for the thing
That crawls around outside.
He'll start with the scratching,
It's always the same,
His claws carving the face
Of the wooden door frame.
Then he'll move onto the blood
Seeping beneath my door,
Dripping from the walls,
Covering the floor.
The wardrobe will squeak,
Those green eyes appear,
Voices will whisper
Dark words in my ear.
Their dead hands will tug
At the edge of my sheets
And insects will crawl
All over my feet.
I lay and wait
For their games to begin.
But tonight will be different,
I whisper with a grin,
Tonight I will show
Those monsters a scare.
They can come back again,
IF they dare.
So this is just a quick little poem I wrote in about 20 minutes. I know it's not perfect and could do with some tweaking here and there, so suggestions are more than welcome!
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spooky1014u Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
this is a very very spooky poem. I love it. You could adapt this into a story about monsters and demons that mess with you and then you show em who's boss by scarin the heck outta them.
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Caylee-Slansen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) stories aren't really my strength, I find it hard to commit myself, however you're more than welcome to have a go yourself if you feel up to it! If you do let me know so I can have a read :D
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
I reread this and I loved it even more than before! Beautiful!! :D :D
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Caylee-Slansen Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! It's one of my favourites too :D
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TheMADGrimReaper Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It somehow reminds me of SCP :iconiseewhatudidthereplz:
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Caylee-Slansen Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Do you think?
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TheMADGrimReaper Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes
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Jasminenightheart Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student Writer
Once again you truely show your self as the female Edger Allen Poe, cudos my friend :)
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Caylee-Slansen Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!!! XD
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Jasminenightheart Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
your welcome
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